Slide 3: assuming you mean GUN not FUN? Second paragraph doesn't really make sense as doesn't really have a point?
- The examples you've given are good but more detail is needed and should write about more than just the themes and lighting. - Even when you are talking about the lighting you can also give more examples than just low-key! - Are there any other links between your credits and the example you've given? Your only link so far is typography rather than conventions of opening credits? - You've shown a good understanding of the theory but haven't linked it to your work at all...
Overall it's generally poor grammar letting your down with quite a lot of mistakes in the way you are writing. You should proof read everything to make sure what you write makes sense and that it actually says something!
Couple of mistakes / typos.,..
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Second paragraph doesn't really make sense as doesn't really have a point?
- The examples you've given are good but more detail is needed and should write about more than just the themes and lighting.
- Even when you are talking about the lighting you can also give more examples than just low-key!
- Are there any other links between your credits and the example you've given? Your only link so far is typography rather than conventions of opening credits?
- You've shown a good understanding of the theory but haven't linked it to your work at all...
Overall it's generally poor grammar letting your down with quite a lot of mistakes in the way you are writing. You should proof read everything to make sure what you write makes sense and that it actually says something!